"Kids" is about Jenny, a girl that is visiting a Bible camp with a menagerie of other girls. These girls fall into a range of people, most of them showing that they're not very-good Christians in some form or fashion. Meanwhile, there is small-scale drama over the girls that like different guys and relationship drama that ensues.
The piece manages to be fun and an easy read in most parts. This is an accomplishment when one considers the number of characters that appear in the piece. It rarely seems ambiguous as to who is speaking of where. However, the main character is named Jenny. The girl who becomes the antagonist character is named Jenna. That gets confusing, and it's an extremely easy fix that I'd think about changing one of their names.
The insider's view of young-girl's culture is interesting and helps to establish the mindsets of the characters, but besides Jenny, all the girls seem to be one character that can be called "conglomerate of early teen girl." I'd like to see a character or two get cut to make room for development of the remaining characters in the group. Jenny, herself, seems really cynical, almost like she's given up on trying to fit in with the other girls or sees herself as better than them. It was hard for me to relate to the her because she came off as unlikable in many points of the story. I'd suggest putting some points where she looks up or envies another girl to make her more rounded and human.
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